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Posted 2025-04-27 17:54:28
#1518402
I think so 		*Chloe*
#133835
Posted 2025-04-27 18:09:40
#1518428
Ok poping in 		Whiteout
#154449
Posted 2025-04-29 10:59:37
#1519351
My post on the rp was my best post ever 		Whiteout
#154449
Posted 2025-04-29 11:06:06
#1519354
Do you want honesty and feedback on that?
Ghost of those lost
#86186
Posted 2025-04-29 11:12:57
#1519358
Btw if your wondering how eagle is so strong she was trained by her parents idk I just thought of it on the spot I just think of things on the spot randomly 		Whiteout
#154449
Posted 2025-04-29 11:14:54
#1519361
And yes please 		Whiteout
#154449
Posted 2025-04-29 11:15:03
#1519362
And yes please 		Whiteout
#154449
Posted 2025-04-29 11:15:13
#1519363
You guys should use this! link I use it sometimes if I'm unsure about where to put certain grammer usually for school. It's very helpful! 		*Chloe*
#133835
Posted 2025-04-29 11:16:45
#1519366
What?(I'm just laughing for no reason😂😂😂😂😂😂😂😂) 		Whiteout
#154449
Posted 2025-04-29 11:40:14
#1519378
Alr please- don't take this to badly- ima try to be sweet
But I lack that ability XD

Your grammar doesn't often make much sense and is a bit confusing, least to me, your ocs tend to know things they most certainly should not for example, Eagle somehow gets the knowledge of what blade calls her without blade even saying it, it lacks depth and interest making it a bit bland or boring to read, fleshing out your characters feelings as well as what they are doing would bring out more of how they are, punctuation n things wise you also ain't that great off but I can't say shit cus I'm pretty bad to.

Correcting the ways your write could definitely improve it as a whole for example when you write:
she was not a feared cat but she was strong but never showed it she liked being called a "newbie bounty hunter" but she was good at her role but never showed it

This is rather confusing just from how it's worded and due to that I can't give a full proof edit since.. idk how your character would react n things BUT, based on what I do gather, it would be similar to this:
Eagle wasn't a feared cat, yes she was strong enough to hold her own she preferred not to show it off as much as most others, occasionally she would catch a quiet meow of some cat trying to insult her with the title ^Newbie bounty hunter^ but it wasn't so often that she minded, in fact she enjoyed watching other underestimate her. Excelling in her role in secret had been how her life tended to be, not that she minded all that much.

Again, please don't use that, I was simply trying to use you past reply and make it a bit better without, completely changing it XD
Ghost of those lost
#86186
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